I do quite like the message, and how it's presented. Yes, noone is perfect, people have strengths and weakness, yadayada. Animation is solid, voice work solid too.
You are referencing an externally stored MP4 file in the flash object. This file is not preloaded, and will cause the movie to not play after clicking play, and display a white box instead. Initially, I thought the flash was broken, but it was just buffering the video.
Firstly, that is bad communication. I was unaware it was loading, that needs to be communicated. A simple "buffering..." message could have done that.
Secondly, the movie is HUGE in filesize. 34.4 MB, served in h264 video, 1280px x 720px @ 2383 kb/s @ 29.97 fps. My internet is incredibly poor, and had to wait ten minutes for it to load, which leads me to my final point...
Lastly, this movie looks like it was animated in flash. WHY NOT SERVE IT AS FLASH?! By rendering it, and serving the render, you are receiving all the downsides of flash (no mobile, can crash unexpectedly) while chucking out all the potential benefits (scales to fit viewer, low filesize, optional quality).
I mean, seriously, why?! Newgrounds HAS a movie player. You could have just submitted the mp4 file. But instead, we have buggy, crash-ridden flash, with none of the benefits... : / (Not to say your code is buggy, flash just keeps crashing! D: )
Great feedback. Thank you.
Definitely works, so that's good.
Continue honing your skills, and make something that tells a story!
Moar, I say, MOAR!
Also, avoid using long tweens on characters. Characters almost NEVER move like that, and it looks off. It works better on faster motions.
I will do that :)
That's true, thanks for the pointers !
Not bad, noticed a few animation errors (Far away eyes, when they frown) but the important part?
It is functional, but really not very substantial. (It's only a few seconds long, after all!) My advice?
Give us MOAR! I crave MOAR! Add sfx, get voice actors, and have voices. Give us a setting, plot (lol), and develop those characters!
Keep up the good work. and give us MOAR!
Thank you very very much ^_^
Okay, first of all. you are abusing your tweens. Tweens are designed primarily for camera or viewport movement. Second, There just isn't any content, really when you look at it. I can't tell what anything is, except the single graphic, which you tween all over the place. Why?
You need a direction. This is just directionless animation, and the result is a mess. You should probably get a writer, director or learn to fulfill these tasks on your own.
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